confidence woman™ (![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif){kind=small} haku) wrote in unseenmonster, |
I think it's good! Several of your sentences end with 'it' and that just anti-pinged me because my English teacher just to harsh me on it, but I don't think the mods will care about how smoothly your sample reads, so I think you're good. The information about Karasumori is a little vague, and while KEKKAISHI READERS know that this is UM KIND OF CANON, I coooould potentially see the mods going 'abuh?', but I think what you have written is clear enough to pass that. ♥
